Wany 58 Posted May 10, 2015 He had just turned fifty. Thirty three years on the same day he had gotten a gift from his grandfather. It was just an old book, it had yellow pages even then. "Who wants a book for his birthday", he thought. He said thanks but disappointment was obvious. Grandpa looked at him, his look suddenly got serious. He opened his mouth but he stood there quiet for a moment. "This book", he said... "This book you'll read when you are my age and pass it on to your grandson before you go". "Go where", he thought... He made a promise to do exactly what he's been told. That was the last time he saw his grandfather. Half a century has passed and the time has finally come. He cleaned dust from the book and made himself cozy. It was pure science-fiction. Book was interesting enough for him to read it in one day, it described a parallel world with minor exceptions. People there don't age. They live happily ever after. "Why did he make me wait until I turn fifty to read this fairytale", Tom thought somewhere in the middle of the book... "You're about to experience something magical. Maple road, at midnight. Come alone.", those were the last written words. He had turned on his car and started driving. Once he was there he could notice the unusual door in the distance. He stepped on the brake and left the car engine on. He had a feeling he wasn't coming back. He turned around briefly and looked at his car lights and town in the distance. "Farewell", he said and continued walking towards the unknown. http://wanysrb.deviantart.com/art/The-Tales-of-Moonaria-1-532286868 Trying something new lol My writing and grammar might suck real bad but we're all here to improve :P 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mikey 1,238 1 Item Posted May 10, 2015 Just awesome. Love the idea of the story with the artwork. Clever and creative.. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Awards
SGTROCK 1,671 Posted May 10, 2015 Love the whole concept of telling the story and building it up to the piece of accompanying art work. Did you write the short story 1st and get the idea for the art after or vice versa? The piece it self in general ties to the theme well but still seems unfinished, and IMO, needs a little 'selling' in terms of the fantasy/ magical aspect the story provokes in me when I read it. The sky and planet look good but think the Fg and middle ground around the character needs some more fx, tying into what's beyond??? Overall really cool effort, love to see more of these Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Maniak_uk 5,063 Posted May 10, 2015 Good work m8 ,cool concept look forward to see what happens next ,agree with sgt about adding some more effects giving it more of a fantasy look :'> kiu Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Awards
Wany 58 Posted May 11, 2015 Thanks for the comments guys :'> @SG, Actually got the idea for the piece first, thought of the story within the process of making Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Freya 2,561 Posted May 11, 2015 Writings not bad apart from "gotten" Looking forward to the next page :'> Agrees that more effects are needed on the artwork and not feeling the border but a really good start. Interesting and creatrive Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Awards
